Writing: Revision
Time to revise our paragraph.
Goal:
Goal:
Read Megan's paragraph. Her paragraph is not in order and doesn't give very many details. What revisions do you think she needs to make?
Rewrite her paragraph on your own. Then, click the Answer button to see the revisions that Megan made.
Paragraph
My bedtime routine begins at night before bed. I do sit-ups and leg lifts, then I take a bath and go to bed. I read to my sister. She is two.
Revision
My bedtime routine begins at 7:30 p.m. when my mom starts her exercise routine. First, I do sit-ups and leg lifts with her. She says I keep her going. Then, I take a bubble bath and get ready for bed. I read a bedtime story to my little sister. She is two. My grandmother listens also. Lastly, the Sandman comes, and I go to sleep.
Megan added her bedtime and more about her exercise routine with her mother. She also moved the "bedtime story" so that it is in the right order.
Now, it is time to revise your first draft.
You can decide if you would like to handwrite or type your revision. Choose what works best for you.
Read the first draft over again. Do you need to add more about something? Do you need to move something around?